tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6360908252479749167.post7786634480398355903..comments2023-12-27T03:05:02.311+08:00Comments on Living Loving and Writing: Friday Flash Fiction - Week 19!Laura Besleyhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/08240502344590881772noreply@blogger.comBlogger10125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6360908252479749167.post-29263606945424640402012-10-11T09:15:26.530+08:002012-10-11T09:15:26.530+08:00Haha! That's a good point! ;)Haha! That's a good point! ;)Laura Besleyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08240502344590881772noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6360908252479749167.post-45604563634652501662012-10-11T07:12:59.372+08:002012-10-11T07:12:59.372+08:00Very nice twist. They need another chair so they c...Very nice twist. They need another chair so they can race down the hill!Tim VanSant Writeshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17614259042362664840noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6360908252479749167.post-64591940608890340302012-10-09T17:11:58.806+08:002012-10-09T17:11:58.806+08:00Yes, I thought of that precise incident when penni...Yes, I thought of that precise incident when penning this story! xxx Laura Besleyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08240502344590881772noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6360908252479749167.post-37103792647806164982012-10-08T15:00:28.858+08:002012-10-08T15:00:28.858+08:00Ha ha! Reminds me of when I let you roll towards t...Ha ha! Reminds me of when I let you roll towards that window! Eek! Fortunately it also turned out well :) Mr & Mrs Knox sounds fun xxxChurnienoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6360908252479749167.post-22407464904418554732012-10-06T19:36:57.903+08:002012-10-06T19:36:57.903+08:00I think that's how it started out in my head, ...I think that's how it started out in my head, but Mrs Knox had different ideas! ;)Laura Besleyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08240502344590881772noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6360908252479749167.post-32323304833063799912012-10-06T17:37:31.195+08:002012-10-06T17:37:31.195+08:00The ending did make me smile, I thought she was tr...The ending did make me smile, I thought she was trying to kill him at first. :) Steve Greenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18414279461366098783noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6360908252479749167.post-91144730806070959632012-10-05T13:19:12.083+08:002012-10-05T13:19:12.083+08:00You're totally right! Can't believe I didn...You're totally right! Can't believe I didn't spot that myself. Thanks for pointing it out. Laura Besleyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08240502344590881772noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6360908252479749167.post-81588135495988129102012-10-05T13:16:13.574+08:002012-10-05T13:16:13.574+08:00Aww, that was a cute ending! I thought she almost ...Aww, that was a cute ending! I thought she almost evil at the start, but he's so excited.<br /><br />Editorial note on the opening line: "As" connotes simultaneity, so you've said she is simultaneously pushing the wheelchair up the hill and letting it roll down at the same time. Would you consider opening with something like, "Mrs. Knox pushed the heavy wheelchair up the hill for the third time that day, then stopped, released and let it roll down the hill."?<br />John Wiswellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07416044628686736927noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6360908252479749167.post-66984323300976424992012-10-05T10:30:03.007+08:002012-10-05T10:30:03.007+08:00Thanks, Tony!Thanks, Tony!Laura Besleyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08240502344590881772noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6360908252479749167.post-42064192930827677752012-10-05T10:00:52.151+08:002012-10-05T10:00:52.151+08:00Great fun!Great fun!Tony Nolandhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15090583562737225942noreply@blogger.com